Kellie Elmore’s Free Write Friday prompt is being held by one of my favorite followers of which I am also a ‘followee’ :), Mark Schutter! His blog has beautiful artistry and poems that come straight from his very heart. It is no surprise that he would be hosting FWF while Kellie is away and we are all in continued prayer for her beautiful baby nephew Khole.
The image prompt that Mark provided is of the magnificent ‘blood moon’. See his explanation here. At first sight, my mind immediately went to the historic Scottish Wars of Independence namely the Battle of Neville’s Cross during the time of the blood moon’s rising in October. This site is said to have been the place where David II led his troops to high ground to prepare for more battles after an unsuccessful battle with England‘s army. It is also said that the site’s erection of this stone cross was paid for by Lord Neville himself due to England’s victory of their battle with the Scottish ‘freedom hunters’.
The image of the blood moon symbolizes ‘hunting season‘, so my poem uses this symbolism (with some old Scottish phrases with meanings in the following lines) to portray the fight for the independence of 12th century Scottish people.
Old Scottish Sayings: These are brief definitions of some of the sayings in the poem that were not translated in the following lines after the sayings or words:
Dreich – drenched
‘We gie it laldy’ – Do it with gusto
‘Do ye dinger’ – Disapproval, loudly
‘Haud yer wheesht’ – Shhh!
‘Whit’s fer ye’ll no go by ye’ – What is meant will be
‘Fair Puckled’ – Short of breath
‘We’re a Jock Tamson’s bairns’ – We’re all God’s children
‘Lang may yer lum reek’ – Live long, stay well
‘Keep the heid’ – Be calm and wait
‘Mair’ – more
‘Ain’ – own
‘Gunnae’ – Going to
‘Frae’ – from
‘Greet’ – cry
‘Hame’ – home
‘Hoachin’ – busy
‘Failin’ means yer playin’ – If you fail, at least you tried
Here goes!
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The Hunter
Blood moon rises,
time has come;
For Death to prevail,
and survival to be won.
“Haste ye back!”
Will our women say;
The hunter goes out,
Fer a long yonder’s stay.
Our harvest has come;
At the time of equinox;
But we must conquer flesh,
And mend our wee flocks.
A man’s belly must be filled;
With a hearty warm stew;
From that which is hunted
From that which we slew.
On the hunt for freedom;
“We gie it laldy, but it’s a dreich day!
Do yer dinger!”,
To England we say.
Wet lands hinder;
Cold winds make us weak,
Night is black as the Earl of Hell’s waistcoat;
“Shhh, haud yer wheesht!”
Silently, we approach;
And attack with all our might;
But ‘whit’s fur ye’ll no go by ye,
And null was our dinger strike…
The hunter is fair puckled;
Long bowmen make us short of breath;
We’re a Jock Tamson’s bairns;
All God’s children suffer death!
Safely, the hunter is led to prepare;
Under the shield of Neville’s Cross;
But our souls now linger,
In the heathered moor’s peat moss.
The blood moon drips;
With trickles of our life’s creek;
Our last wish for survivors is,
“Lang may yer lum reek!
Keep the heid – stay calm!
Accept this wee defeat;
There will be mair battles;
When our ain will nae retreat!
Bide ye the next gunnae;
For now, yes – for noo;
We shall hail our ain king,
At the next going to!”
Mair blood shall be shed;
“Frae the enemy!”, we greet,
Their hame shall be heathered moors,
Where hoachin’ ghosts linger in moss peat.
The blood moon rises;
In the auld lands that very be;
Failin’me ans yer playin’ – “Don’t stop!”
We shall keep the heid until we are free!
I hope that these old Scottish sayings did justice to this piece and I hope that you enjoyed! 🙂
Oct 20, 2013 @ 04:27:37
Charlene this is wonderful! Full of history (I learned some things!) and reads like an ancient poem from long ago that was sung by around campfires! I loved it, thank you!
Oct 20, 2013 @ 05:53:54
Thank you so much Mark! What you said in your comment was my ultimate goal! 🙂
Oct 20, 2013 @ 07:40:53
I LOVE IT! Truly a poem that while strongly historic, is a strong narrative that makes it seem as we were there. Especially with the use of the Scottish language.
Oct 20, 2013 @ 20:04:28
Thanks Kim, I’m glad you enjoyed!
Oct 20, 2013 @ 15:40:32
Great stuff. The Scottish dialect added to the feel of being under the Hunter’s Moon, with so much at stake.
Oct 20, 2013 @ 20:05:30
Thank you Phylor, I have always been fascinated with Scottish dialect as well as their history.
Oct 22, 2013 @ 09:07:50
I certainly feel that I’ve had a good introduction through this post on the hunter’s moon.
Oct 21, 2013 @ 02:37:52
I love this, Charlene, and honestly, echo what the others have said. I think you did a wonderful job with the Scottish sayings, which only added more authenticity to your words…xx
Oct 21, 2013 @ 13:49:21
Incredible approach to the writing, with ye accent, a touch of a highland bard. Top writing.
Oct 21, 2013 @ 23:44:20
I appreciate your comment – thank ye much! 🙂
Oct 24, 2013 @ 00:29:59
Very cool with the Scottish sayings, Charlene! I like the drive and passion expressed in the poem too. Way.To.Go.You. !!
Oct 24, 2013 @ 18:07:45
Thanks Christy!!
Oct 24, 2013 @ 03:45:07
the passion, love, and humanity put into this – beautiful. I ♡ it. Charlene you are beautiful!
Oct 24, 2013 @ 18:12:01
I truly enjoyed putting it together, thank you so much Devynstella! ❤